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I know what you're thinking. She's perfect. Every girl wants to be her. Every guy wants to get with her. High school royalty; the Queen. With her grace, charms, poise, ...

This seems really powerful, but it doesn't seem like there's enough detail. I think you were trying to be intentionally ambiguous, but that some of the meaning was lost because ...

I'm a total history nerd, but not much of a poet. I therefore, like the topic a lot. I can't decide, though, if it was about the French during World ...

I know part three has been very long in coming, but here goes. "I'm Mary," she voiced unsteadily, unsure of how he would react. He could see her; there was ...

It's a good idea, though you've not revealed much of the story so far. You do need to watch your word choice, though. I think that you're trying to use ...

It's genius, but what else is new. Nitpicks away! The Seattle Ducks are amphibious vehicles. They can drive on land, and serve as a boat. People go on tours of ...

Holy Crap. Good job as usual. A few nitpicks. Losing all of my rational thought, I walked under the branches of the biggest willow tree. For some reason, "losing," doesn't ...

I know you don't want nitpicks, but they make the best editors. I really liked this, though it did admittedly confuse me because I'm not really up to date on ...

This is a really funny idea. I can tell that you sat down with the actual Harry Potter book and parodied the first chapter sentence by sentence. If that's not ...

I really like the concept. It's like the opposite of all of John Donne's poems that are basically him begging for sex. This song focuses on a healthy relationship rather ...

Good job again. Just watch your past and present tense; they need to be consistent. Here are a few things I noticed. It was all too surreal for her fathom, ...

It's a cool concept, but you need to consider both what you're trying to say and how you say it. You might want a bit more basis. It just all ...

Looks like somebody's beat me to the nitpicking, but I'd still like to let you know what I think. It was really good, but I honestly didn't realize George was ...

Great job! I'm a little older than the ages you described as an intended audience, but I enjoyed it. I'd love to read more.

Good job. It's a great idea! You might be able to refine it a bit more, but you've got an amazing story to work with. If you want to turn ...